如何寫出英語高分作文(2)
如何寫出英語高分作文
?、匍_門見山、點題。
②真情流露,理由充分。
?、畚闹袔Φ倪B詞使用得恰當,使文章過渡自然、
?、芮擅钍褂镁湫鸵员頉Q心。
[點評]:檔次13-14分。
?、偾宄磉_寫作目的,要點齊全。
?、谡Z言表達靈活多樣,字里行間流露出真情實感,文章有感染力。
③恰當使用連詞和從句,語言流暢,且無錯誤,是一篇高質(zhì)量的作文。
[高分突破]
?、傥捏w:記敘文。
②要點:what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future。
?、蹠r態(tài):一般現(xiàn)在時,一般過去時,一般將來時的自然變化。
內(nèi)容具有開放性,但它也是"控制性"的寫作試題,因此不能隨意發(fā)揮,要善于抓信息,寫完要點。選用這兩篇學生真實習作,一是因為他們選材相同,二是因為他們都是英語成績優(yōu)秀的同學。同學b靈活使用連詞so…that, so, little by little, when, so that等,恰到好處地使用新句型和短語used to, became interested in, come true……等,使內(nèi)容豐富,讀起來優(yōu)美流暢。其實這些表達同學a也會,只是缺乏技術(shù)加工。通過這兩篇作文點評,同學們便能悟出其中的奧妙。
四、培養(yǎng)途徑
1. 根據(jù)老師布置的寫作內(nèi)容,獨立完成一篇寫作。
2. 與同伴合作,交流自己的寫作,通過交流找出各自作文中寫得好的地方和優(yōu)美的句子,合作創(chuàng)造一篇新的文章,供大家欣賞。
3. 找老師點評,請求老師指點,尤其是怎樣潤色。
4. 自己糾錯,寫下反思。
五、備考演練
a
縉云山是重慶著名的游覽勝地,每天有大量的游客。請你根據(jù)下面提供的信息寫一篇報道,說明現(xiàn)在的游客在環(huán)境保護方面的變化。
寫作要求:
1. 詞數(shù)在100左右。
2. 條理清楚,語句通順。
3. 開頭已寫好,但不計入總詞數(shù)。
Jinyun mountain is a famous place of interest …
b
閱讀電視廣告詞:"if we don't save water , the last drop of water will be a tear-drop."根據(jù)提示,寫一篇60-80詞的短文。
提示:
1. 生活離不開水。
2. 可飲用水在減少。
3. 水污染嚴重。
4. 應(yīng)保護水源,再利用水。思路點撥與參考答案
a. [思路點撥]:
①文體:記敘文。
②時態(tài):一般過去時態(tài),一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。采用正反對比的寫作手法,增加感染力。
?、蹖懽髂康模焊嬖V讀者保護環(huán)境的重要性。
Jinyun mountain is a famous place of interest . Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. but a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting the environment. they threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground. sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food. How dangerous it was. luckily, great changes have taken place here. tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins, and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well. They bring their own meals instead of cooking to prevent starting a forest fire in the mountains. All these changes make us very happy.
b. [思路點撥]:
?、賷A敘夾議(說明現(xiàn)狀,談?wù)劯邢?。
?、跁r態(tài):一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。
?、蹚V告詞的含義--水很重要,應(yīng)保護和再利用(寫作意圖)。
Water is very important to humans. we can't live without water. The water we can drink is falling. but some people don't seem to care about it. They waste a lot of water. They pour dirty water into rivers and lakes. Water pollution is getting more and more serious. So we must do something to stop the pollution. We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it. if we don't do this, the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.